Michael van Koetsveld(Wednesday, 15 May 2019 02:33)
A fun exchange, but a bit slow, if I'm honest.I'll read it again when I've had some sleep.
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Sharn(Friday, 26 April 2019 07:44)
Hey Adam,
Really loved this! Agree with Lorenzo - don’t think you need the boss!
Sharn
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Jo Raggett(Wednesday, 20 March 2019 12:23)
Fabulous and funny! I can just imagine this actually happening!
Maybe have them freeze before the impact happens - so even if the freezer would have protected them, their stupidity at leaving it switched on would kill them anyway!
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Lorenzo Colonna(Tuesday, 19 February 2019 11:36)
Hi Adam. I like the story and the tone. :) I was wondering if you need the supermarket boss; he doesn't add too much to the story and you could use those lines to show us a bit more of the friendship
between Bradley and Rick.
Michael van Koetsveld (Wednesday, 15 May 2019 02:33)
A fun exchange, but a bit slow, if I'm honest.I'll read it again when I've had some sleep.
Sharn (Friday, 26 April 2019 07:44)
Hey Adam,
Really loved this! Agree with Lorenzo - don’t think you need the boss!
Sharn
Jo Raggett (Wednesday, 20 March 2019 12:23)
Fabulous and funny! I can just imagine this actually happening!
Maybe have them freeze before the impact happens - so even if the freezer would have protected them, their stupidity at leaving it switched on would kill them anyway!
Lorenzo Colonna (Tuesday, 19 February 2019 11:36)
Hi Adam. I like the story and the tone. :) I was wondering if you need the supermarket boss; he doesn't add too much to the story and you could use those lines to show us a bit more of the friendship between Bradley and Rick.