Danny has only an hour to lose his virginity.
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Andrew Griffin (Wednesday, 26 December 2018 14:17)
Hi Phil. Quite a colourful script, with a protagonist doing what a lot of virgin teenagers may want to do in the hour before annihilation. Given the page limit, the timeline in the script is
necessarily compressed so you have a lot of steps to get through from introducing the character to, ahem, a satisfactory conclusion. Because of this, the story feels rushed, so it may be worth
thinking about starting at the opening of the door by Mrs. Pringle? This gives you longer for the action to reach its, er, climax?
Loved the ending!
Lee Betteridge (Thursday, 07 February 2019 13:36)
Hi Phil. Loved this. Felt a little 'Benny Hill,' which is a positive in my opinion, or even 'Carry On.' I agree with the comment above - tightening up the beginning may add to more fun