Dear Dee,
You've a sweet little descriptive script. The only thing I would change is you've three 'just's' in quick succession which jump out and I wondered if there was a way of switching one, or two?
I appreciate the child is possibly aping a parent, or whatever but it threw me out a little.
Kind regards,
Eileen
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Mark Walker(Sunday, 17 March 2019 18:17)
Love it. That is all!
#3
Jaye Nolan(Thursday, 30 May 2019 19:16)
Beautiful script, I'm in awe. It came alive in my head - I could see and hear them both, along with the nature.
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Eileen Wilson (Friday, 04 January 2019 17:38)
Dear Dee,
You've a sweet little descriptive script. The only thing I would change is you've three 'just's' in quick succession which jump out and I wondered if there was a way of switching one, or two?
I appreciate the child is possibly aping a parent, or whatever but it threw me out a little.
Kind regards,
Eileen
Mark Walker (Sunday, 17 March 2019 18:17)
Love it. That is all!
Jaye Nolan (Thursday, 30 May 2019 19:16)
Beautiful script, I'm in awe. It came alive in my head - I could see and hear them both, along with the nature.