Really like this and can see it being very cinematic. The computer screen stuff would come across very well and so would the relationship of the two characters. However, you have 2 and a half pages
of script so it is out with the scissors to get it down to 2 pages to make sure you are within the rules.
I would take out what is not essential to Sophie - touching doll, Christmas chat etc and reduce variations on "I love you" message, even though you may feel they are essential!!
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Tom J Hingley (Saturday, 05 January 2019 14:21)
Hi Andrew
Really like this and can see it being very cinematic. The computer screen stuff would come across very well and so would the relationship of the two characters. However, you have 2 and a half pages of script so it is out with the scissors to get it down to 2 pages to make sure you are within the rules.
I would take out what is not essential to Sophie - touching doll, Christmas chat etc and reduce variations on "I love you" message, even though you may feel they are essential!!
Best of luck
Tom