'Into The Red Sky' by Simon Olivier

 

As news of the impending impact spreads, one girl's seemingly futile gesture holds unexpected power.
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  • #1

    Christopher Dane (Monday, 03 June 2019 20:03)

    Very charming and a lovely take on the brief... the amount of people and locations would be a problem but maybe it could be a community project to film it... would be very heart warming! Bit of a cheat to write "Anna explains" but space is at a premium right :-)

  • #2

    Leilani Holmes (Monday, 03 June 2019 20:59)

    A refreshing and unusual response to imminent danger, and one that would be adaptable to whatever locations might be available to a filmmaker, although I love the impending force of nature that's hinted at by the calm sea view. It seems maybe a little far fetched that people would just keep blowing at the sky beyond the first interaction, I wonder if it turned more like a group of people deep breathing to stay calm, perhaps that would have more impact than just the silliness of trying to turn back an asteroid by blowing but either way this is very sweet.

  • #3

    Teodora (Monday, 03 June 2019 23:45)

    I second Leilani on this. Hard to believe that people would keep blowing but then again they are all going to die, so who knows what random acts of madness people might succumb to. I do like the idea of the main character managing to bring people together despite everything.

  • #4

    Josephine Samson (Tuesday, 04 June 2019 15:52)

    I love the absurdity of the response to impending doom, the willingness to engage in silly behaviour with a slight bit of hope underneath that it might actually work, after all there's nothing to lose, right. It made me smile. The only thing I'm not sure of is the time frame. How long were they all there blowing into the sky? This might impact the believability of it for me.

  • #5

    Harriet Riley (Tuesday, 04 June 2019 18:33)

    This is very sweet, I like the community coming together to do something both futile and hopeful, the fact that she turns the negativity of others into positivity. The only part that didn't completely make sense was the scene on the beach with the old man at the beginning. Why is he offended? Maybe consider cutting her line ("wait, I didn't mean...") and simply showing his grumpiness.

  • #6

    David Wike (Tuesday, 04 June 2019 20:53)

    I read this and found myself reminded of some (certainly misquoted expression) that imagination can change the world.

    There is an inherent sweet childlike naivety to the story, someone finding their way to cope, manage and accidentally inspiring others along the way against a world enraptured by their own cynical cyclical normality in the face of the end's enormity. In fact, for me, the greater antagonist in this piece is not the Asteroid, its apathy.

    And I like that, that the protagonist stands up when they shouldn't be able to an win others over, surpassing apathy, is heroic, especially when you know you can't triumph over the inevitable. The victory becomes something else, about unity.

    This all sounds very serious for what is a vibrant script. A very complete script too, the direction, dialogue and characters are equally as unified as the Players at the end. Perhaps most enjoyable for me was I felt this script was very much of the writer.

  • #7

    Thandi Lubimbi (Wednesday, 05 June 2019 19:33)

    I really liked this. It was sweet, mischievous, charming and cute.

  • #8

    Shuk Gant (Sunday, 09 June 2019 21:51)

    I could really see and feel this, it had a very memorable tone and I found it beautiful. I actually pictured this in Hastings (probably because on a quiet day it's already a bit like the end of the world). In response to some of the comments above, my offering to consider is that people will do anything for kids, Bark like a dog, speak in silly voices... perhaps the introduction of an upset child later in the script would provide more motivation for grownups uniting together and blowing away the meteor. Anyhoo, Great Job!

  • #9

    Marie (Monday, 10 June 2019 21:11)

    Such a sweet vision, clearly delivered. Although I’m not sure I’d want to spend my last minutes blowing the sky ;-)