Mark Walker (Sunday, 28 April 2019 18:01)

Thanks Richard, glad you liked it... And thanks for the suggestions!

Richard Osborne (Saturday, 27 April 2019 13:12)

Ooooohhh, brilliant. Unfortunately I read some of the comments first which gave me a few hints, so spoiler warning for anyone else :)

I think this works really well. It’s terrifying but we can identify with it.

I had some ideas, which I’ll add, but which I’m not convinced will add anything, but something for you to think about if you like;
1) A more specific/less generic name that William was called by Gary or an escalation of what has happened, ‘Because I’m a nerd, who has no friends to help him, who’ll never be strong enough - something which is about William saying actually I am stronger than you after all.
2) Perhaps a phone/clock which shows the minutes left to the event.

Mark Walker (Friday, 26 April 2019 15:33)

Thanks All, glad you like it!

Shane, interesting thoughts and will have a think for the rewrite.
Sharn, I tried to be subtle with the reference to how much time they have so I could try and keep the announcement out completely to save space.... the viewers will know what is happening so hopefully put 2 and 2 together, but a bit more in the reference to time might be useful.

Michael, if someone wants to make this we might need to make sure we have sufficient insurance! :-)

Shane Anderson (Friday, 26 April 2019 14:46)

I really like this. It is wickedly wonderful. I did think of things you could add in about dropping off bits with his mum and the shears being 'Ever sharp - A lifetime guarantee' but really it doesn't need these.

Good luck.

Sharn Gill (Friday, 26 April 2019 00:05)

I like this concept actually - the exacting of revenge at the final moments. There was no mention of the impending end of the world though...

Michael van Koetsveld (Thursday, 25 April 2019 23:17)

With some inventive camera work, dodging and ducking to avoid the thrown items, this looks like a very makeable film. Just need to armour the camera operator!