Interesting and different. I’d suggest starting later. Begin with them lined up at the starting line. You don’t need the, forgive me for saying dull setup. The rest of this is the meat, the
interesting part. Taking one last run with a sibling is great but towards the end you hint at a horror. I’d like to see that hint expanded upon just a little bit more.
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Mark Renshaw (Friday, 22 March 2019 12:29)
Interesting and different. I’d suggest starting later. Begin with them lined up at the starting line. You don’t need the, forgive me for saying dull setup. The rest of this is the meat, the interesting part. Taking one last run with a sibling is great but towards the end you hint at a horror. I’d like to see that hint expanded upon just a little bit more.